這篇essay很簡(jiǎn)單，卻被哈佛商學(xué)院作為文書范文！

哈佛商學(xué)院文書范文

哈佛商學(xué)院文書的題目如下：

You’re applying to Harvar Business School. We can see your resume, school transcripts, extra-curricular activities, awars, post-MBA career goals, test scores an what your recommeners have to say about you. What else woul you like us to know as we consier your caniacy? (No wor limit)

你正在申請(qǐng)哈佛商學(xué)院。我們可以看到你的簡(jiǎn)歷、學(xué)校成績(jī)單、課外活動(dòng)、獎(jiǎng)項(xiàng)、工商管理碩士職業(yè)目標(biāo)、考試分?jǐn)?shù)和你的推薦者所說的關(guān)于你的事。那么，作為候選人，你還有什么是希望我們知道的？(無字?jǐn)?shù)限制)

也就是說，在你的文書中不能出現(xiàn)任何材料中已經(jīng)提及的經(jīng)歷或過去，而是需要通過這篇文書補(bǔ)充一些招生官不了解的事情。那么該寫些什么？如何去寫？不妨讓我們來看一篇范文。

What else woul I like you to know?

I am who I am toay mostly because of my brother [name]. [name] was born when I was four years ol, an he ha an extremely rare birth efect calle Robert’s Synrome. At the time, he was one of a hanful in the worl to have it. He was born without arms, couln’t walk or talk, an ha many other severe physical an mental efects. It was a complete shock to my parents. He was only expecte to live for a ay or two, but after a few weeks in the hospital he was healthy enough to come home with us. I was too young to really unerstan what was going on; I was just excite to have a brother.

[name] was a full-time job for us. For his entire life he was incapable of oing anything for himself. My parents an I in’t have much, but we i have an amazing family an group of friens to support us. We couln’t have taken care of [name] without all of them, an seeing this level of sacrifice from so many people ha a huge impact on me. No one ever complaine. No one ever hesitate. We just i what we ha to, an I saw first-han at a young age how important it is to work together an help those aroun you. An our family (extene inclue), became so much closer because of how we came together for [name], an that closeness still hols toay.

[name] ene up living for about four years, an I’m so grateful for the lessons I learne from him. My generosity, kinness, team work, an inepenence, come irectly from him being in my life. An learning to eal with that level of stress an responsibility mae me a much, much stronger person than I woul have been without.

So my family an I have carrie [name]’s memory with us since he passe in the form of giving to others. About ten years ago, we starte a charity calle [institution], whose purpose is to supply bes an being to chilren in our area who are without. The thought was that [name] spent most of his life in be, an if we han’t ha a ecent one for him his life woul have been so uncomfortable. As of this year, we have supplie almost [number] kis with mattresses, blankets, an stuffe animals, an each year we are able to help more an more chilren.

This mentality of service has been a big part of my life since we starte [institution], an as I got oler I wante to start branching out to new service opportunities. An let me tell you, [city] has been a great place to start. This city has mae a serious impression on me. Anyone who’s from here either loves it or hates it, but either way, [city] is the kin of place that efines a person. [city] is the unerog, full of unrealize potential. Living in a place like this has opene my eyes to the heartache of misse opportunities (not even mentioning our sports teams…), an it’s because of this that I’ve become so involve in the community. I’ve been able to work with so many very smart, riven people, an together we’ve one a lot to make a positive impact. My work with the [institution] has allowe me to help raise over [number] for small, local NFPs, an my work with the [institution] has complemente that with a more hans-on, service base focus. An being a Big Brother through [institution] has allowe me to make a lasting, consistent impact in a more focuse way.

All of these, together with working for a commercial bank, have given me a very satisfying life balance. I’m able to o so many things, an able to make a tangible impact in each of them. But sometimes I o so much that I on’t take the time to stop an look aroun – to process what’s happening. This was missing in my life. I know that the path I’ been taking was the right one for me, I’ just never truly felt reay to move on to the next phase.

This change this past summer when I i my first [event]. If you’re not familiar with this, it’s a [number] mile swim followe by a [number] mile bike an then a [number] mile run. Still seems nuts to me. I’ never one a triathlon of any kin before I signe up for this, but was so overwhelme by watching my frien compete in the same one the year before. I’ll never forget the moment: I was watching a quariplegic go up the final – an largest – hill in his wheelchair, sweating, grunting, an crying. An finishing. I’m pretty sure everyone watching that was crying; it was one of the most moving things I’ ever seen. So I signe up.

Training for this requires a serious amount of time, most of which you’re alone with your thoughts (no music allowe uring the race, so you train without). Eight hours biking, five running, an two swimming, each week for seven months, is so mentally taxing, an your min goes to some new places. I starte reflecting a lot, an really began to unerstan the choices I’ve mae an the impact they’ve ha. I thought a lot about where I was in life, why I was there, an what I woul have one ifferently along the way. I thought about what I wante for my future, not just career-wise, but in orer to be happy. An it’s not so much that my views change from this experience, but I feel like I’ve gaine a new level of clarity. I’m much more confient in my life goals, an can pursue them with prie an conviction.

I’m now reay to move on to the next phase of my life, an am very excite to o so.

這篇范文出自2014年的一位申請(qǐng)者，essay題目叫做《The Giver》，通讀全文你會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)這篇essay遣詞造句出人意料的簡(jiǎn)單樸實(shí)，高中生也能毫無障礙地看懂，但是卻成功入選HBS“essay寫作指導(dǎo)”的最佳范文之一，為什么呢？

首先，文章情感表達(dá)的真實(shí)感人，每段銜接的非常自然，語言樸實(shí)地道，不露聲色的回答了why MBA, why now。

其次，哈佛商學(xué)院“essay寫作指導(dǎo)”的編輯是這樣評(píng)價(jià)的：這是一個(gè)關(guān)于某人的人生軌跡如何被自己兄弟出生而影響的事件，事件本身就很有意義。而且，這件事改變了作者對(duì)待社會(huì)對(duì)待他人的方式，甚至改變了他的信仰，這種影響力是強(qiáng)大的。而能夠用簡(jiǎn)單清晰的方式表達(dá)出這種強(qiáng)大的文章就是powerful essay 。

每篇powerful essay都需要做到的一點(diǎn)是“show who you are beyon your resume”——具體來說就是“你的重點(diǎn)是什么，生活中你想要做什么，什么事成就了現(xiàn)在的你，現(xiàn)在你為什么想做這件事“。

因?yàn)椋猩僖呀?jīng)知道你上的什么學(xué)校，參加過什么俱樂部，經(jīng)歷過什么職業(yè)，但是他們不知道這些經(jīng)歷如何影響和造就了你，所以你就是要告訴他們這些，這就是這篇essay的意義。

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